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Post by Eissa_Me_Mario Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:23 pm

Time passed
Things changed
You moved on
I went my own way
I fell for you
You changed your mind
You let go
I held on tight
I told you I cared
You said you did too
You promised you wouldn't hurt me
I believed that was true
Our past came back to get me
Switching me for you
You let me down
You broke my heart
I started to wonder
Was this your plan from the start?
I miss you now
And will forever
I wish you were here
More than ever
You changed me
And made me better
So for that
I will love you forever!
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Post by Kazuma Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:24 pm

How does that involve a cracker???? You really need titles no offense. Anyways... very nice poem and I like it even though it could be LONGER but other than that you got chops kid you got chops.
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Post by Eissa_Me_Mario Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:27 pm

lol
pork chops?
pork chops are good with apples Razz
anyway thanks it was supposed to be that length though
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Post by Kazuma Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:29 pm

.... um I have no idea what your eating .....

but some poems like that for example need more content... event though I'm not an expert I know a little for experience.
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Post by Eissa_Me_Mario Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:34 pm

Ok I agree
It was spur of a moment trip down memory lane kind-a-thing
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Post by chimes- Mon Feb 23, 2009 6:42 pm

ewwwiieee
pork chops with apples?
I can understand apples with cheese and brown sugar and cinnamon.
Anyway, yeah it could be longer like everyone (Kaz) said.
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Post by Ruri Tue Feb 24, 2009 7:13 am

I agree.. pork chops with apples sounds gross
Sugar apples yes, maple syrup yes.... But pork? Ewww...

Nice job! I disagree on the length.. long poems are often too long, and the poet often doesn't have enough content to the poem to keep it interesting.
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Post by Kazuma Tue Feb 24, 2009 1:47 pm

true but longer content makes more meaning is emotion and poems are writing through emotions...
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Post by Kachiri Tue Feb 24, 2009 2:18 pm

i dont care how long it was, that poem was awesome ^^ Wow it makes so much sense!! </3

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Post by Eissa_Me_Mario Tue Feb 24, 2009 3:57 pm

A love poem will not always be long and flowery. Sometimes what you need to say can be very short. In fact it may be the fact that the poem is short that makes it special. Its short length may show that you put the time and effort in to make every word count. You considered carefully every word choice. Every word choice has a reason behind it.
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Post by chung chin Tue Feb 24, 2009 6:34 pm

that's deep...
but y the cracker?
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Post by Eissa_Me_Mario Tue Feb 24, 2009 7:22 pm

cause crackers r cool [::]
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Post by chung chin Wed Feb 25, 2009 1:59 pm

lol.. niiice
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